Maintain third-person limited viewpoint

Separate what the viewpoint character observes, remembers, and infers from what other characters privately know. Signal inferences through behavior or wording.

Try it

Replace a statement about the guard's hidden fear with an action the librarian can notice, such as his hand staying on the latch.

References

• Fiction writing basics · CUNY OpenLab

• Anchor an opening scene quickly
• Build a consistent first-person narrator